I need to re-write my iPhone App description to make it more appealing to new users. Our target market are ages from 12-30.
The app is on the iPhone App Store, called Tap Secret.
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Here's our current text:
Can't type? Tap it!
In a boring blind date? Tap your friends for code blue.
Hanging out in a bar or mall? Secretly exchange ratings with your friends without the hottie knowing.
Surprise quiz? I can't even suggest ways you could use this.. ;-)
The new way to send & receive short coded secret messages between friends without pulling out your phone from your pocket!
Tap 1 if you're having fun
Tap 2 I have no clue
Tap 3 if you agree
Tap 4 meet me at the exit door
Tap 5 I'm about to drive
Tap 6 order more drinks
Tap 7 be here by eleven
Tap 8 if you're late
Tap 9 I need more wine
Tap 10 exclusive for men
Use the Tap Secret codes as a guideline to determine what each tap means, then start tapping your phone and it will send the message to your friends. The possibilities are endless, you and your friends decide!
This app requires you and your friends to be online and in the same tap room to send/receive messages (like a chat room). Then just tap your phone in your pocket to send messages. Your friends will receive multiple vibes for each tap you sent. We suggest practice tapping on your own so that you're ready to tap when you need it.
Use find rooms nearby to quickly find your friends' room! It uses GPS to locate Tap rooms nearby. Optionally password protect your room so only your friends can join! Up to 8 people per room!
Note: Tap Secret needs an internet connection. Works on EDGE, 3G, and Wifi! It is an application that needs at least 2 users to enjoy.
Note: On iPod Touch some features are not available (vibrate, tap feedback).
We're giving away $100 U.S. to the best suggested legends in three different categories! Find out more info at our forum [url removed, login to view]
Review by SixStringTorture (5 stars):
"Without question, one of the most innovative and unique ways to approach discreet communications. You should also update your description to include some of the really great overt ways of using TapSecret. There are speech and even physically impaired individuals that could greatly benefit from putting together a short list of pre-defined messages, and using just the power of their finger to communicate to the outside world. Tap Secret may have started out as a social networking app, but I think we're going to see some huge things from this baby, and at that point, the price will (and should) skyrocket!"
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Although we are getting a lot of clicks, only 3% conversion rate (on the free one!). I think perhaps the description needs to be better to get that conversion rate up.
So this bid is for updating the description to be more appealing and better. I suggest downloading Tap Secret Lite (free) to understand what the app is about.
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