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Reworded Blog Post

Hi, here's a new version of your blog post. I've kept it mostly conversation. I'd suggest going into the baseball bat incident more and how that ended in repressing the fantasy, that's definitely something to hook readers with. If you'd like any changes (or for me to add that in) just let me know.

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  • Brendajkipling
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    • 4 kuukautta sitten

    JaKe, I like what you did and I appreciate that you researched the actual statistic on the threesome fantasy. That made a huge difference in the story.

    • 4 kuukautta sitten